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Tuesday, March 13, 2012

Genma's Shame




Genma's Shame
A Ranma 1/2 Fanfiction
by Michael A. Ivins

This story begins before the start of the Manga. This chapter has Lemon content. If that sort of thing offends you, Please stop reading. I don't own Ranma and friends.

Chapter 1
A Few Fresh Berries with Dinner

For those who've read fanfictions of Ranma before this is a familiar scene. We are at the training ground of Cursed Springs, Jusenkyo. Two martial artists practicing on top of the bamboo poles. A large, bald man fell in spring and a panda leapt out. The boy who was sparring is shocked and freezes for a moment, allowing the panda to smack him into a different pool.

From water of the second pool emerges a petite, pretty red haired girl. She hears the guide say, "Oh, too bad! You fall in Spring of Drowned Girl. Very tragic story of girl who drown in spring 1500 year ago. Now whoever fall in spring take body of young girl." The girl pulled open the top of her gi and sees nicely sized feminine breasts.

Anger erupts, a chase ensues. A red haired girl wishes to deal out divine punishment to her idiot father who was a panda at the time. A change in the usual script occurs. The lost traveler steps out of the way of a panda being chased by a girl screaming curses and promises of punishment. This Traveler came close to the edge of the cliff but windmilled his arms and caught his balance. Ryoga gets no curse unless you count stupidity and getting lost as a curse.

After everyone had a chance to calm down a little, Ranma and Genma met back at the Guide's hut. The received the spiel about hot and cold water and a lack of cures. Before the demonstration could proceed a young man came to door. When he failed to find the two people he was looking for, he left and got lost again.

Genma is disgusted with the curse. He turns into a panda. He has trouble thinking of a more useless animal. Ranma on the other hand, turned into a girl, a beautiful teenaged version of his own dear wife. Some strict self control would need to be exercised to keep hands off that body.

With all that's happened, Genma decided that this is not a good place to hang around. He was low on supplies but decided that he had enough to last them to the next village if they supplemented with wild nuts and berries. They had lived off the land before and would likely do it again. Because of this decision he declined the guide's offer to take them to the village of Joketsuzoku. While it might have been nice to watch the tournament, what could he learn from watching a bunch of weak women fight.

After the tournament finished and the victory feast was shared, Elder Cologne and her Great Granddaughter went to speak to the Guide at Jusenkyo. He had been invited but hadn't made it to the Tournament so the Champion went to tell him the results of the competition.

The Guide told his Amazon visitors about the two Outsiders who had recently been cursed.

In Mandarin, Elder Cologne asked, "Where are these two? You usually bring newly cursed travelers by the village so we can see them."

"This one is terribly sorry, Honored Elder," the guide replied. "The father of the two said they had more 'interesting experiences' on this trip than they had bargained for. I told him that they would be able to replenish their supplies at your village but he said they were used to living off the land. If they didn't have enough food with them, they would forage for wild nuts and berries."

"Wild berries?" The elder looked troubled. "Tell me old friend, which way did these travelers go?"

Pointing, the guide told her, "They left the valley going that way. Why do you ask? Is there a problem?"

The Elder closed her eyes a moment. "In the forest in their direction of travel is an area that has many bushes of Xi Thran berry bushes."

The guide's expression became thoughtful. "I believe I heard that name. What is special about those berries?"

"This is the time of year that the berries are just coming to ripeness," the tiny woman answered. "A party of young men was to be sent to this area to gather all they could find in a few days. The berries are used as the base of a large number of potions after they have been dried and crushed into a powder. They have strong magic. In their pure form and freshly ripe the berries are a strong aphrodisiac."

Shan Pu frowned and asked, "Is an aphrodisiac going to do anything if both of them are men?"

"Yes, it will," replied the elder in grim tones. "It's worse than you think. The effect of the berries is strong enough that it won't matter to them that they are parent and child. As for the fact that both are male, you heard that the boy is cursed by Nyanniichuan and the father knows of it. We must try to find those two. Unless we find them and restrain them, that poor girl is going to be raped."

Shan Pu looked in the direction the Guide had pointed. "It's not much to go on. We just have a direction of travel. There is more than one path and several places they could take shelter for the night."

"I cannot in good conscience leave this alone," the Elder said. "If we can stop it, we should."

The guide was asked to go to the village to get more help while Cologne and Shan Pu went on into the forest

Off in the forest where they had gone, Ranma and Genma found clear spot to set up their tents. It was obvious the spot had been used for a camping area before because there was a circle of stones with old ashes. There was also sticks set up to take a spit for cooking. Before long they had a fire going.

Genma picked up a cloth bag he had been carrying. This was full of wild nuts and a lot of wild berries. Some of the berries were purple, but the large majority were a yellowish orange color. Genma counted it lucky that they had found so many berries and nuts as it would help to stretch their meager supplies until they could somewhere to buy or steal more food.

So far they had been lucky that day that no rain had fallen to change them into their cursed forms. The sky was overcast and threatening and it seemed a safe bet that it would be raining by the time they were ready to set out in the morning.

The two travelers engaged in the usual battle for food, but each managed to get enough to prevent their stomachs from rumbling. After eating they sparred a little, but it was getting too dark to properly see what they were doing. While that alone was not enough of a reason to stop, both had a lot on their minds. Getting cursed was a rather major thing to think about.

As he sat by the fire, Genma found himself thinking about his wife, Nodoka. He hadn't thought about her in years, but it was hard not to now when Ranma's cursed form looked so much like she did. The older man's thoughts began to drift into contemplation of what his wife had been like in bed.

It was with a start that Genma realized that his thoughts on the past had given him an erection. This had happened before and mostly he would just hide it from the boy and take care of it in the privacy of his tent later. For some reason that thought didn't appeal.

Looking over at his son, Genma realized that the boy was looking very distracted. That's when he noticed that the front of his son's gi pants were bulging just like Genma's own. Maybe there was something in the air tonight or maybe something in the berries they ate. Whatever the reason, both were aroused.

The bald man shook his head. Since he had left on the training trip, he had avoided any gay sexual encounters. He had done them in the past with his old friend Soun and had enjoyed them, but had to consider the threat of Nodoka finding out and declaring it "unmanly." That would likely be an unmitigated disaster.

The thought of his red haired wife, brought his mind back to how his son had looked as a girl. She was a real looker and fiery. How would she be in bed, he wondered.

Not sure why he was doing it, he called out, "Boy."

Ranma seemed off in a world of his own. He wasn't paying attention to his father and didn't seem to care that anyone else was there. The boy was pretty ignorant of sex in general because of his father's reluctance to teach him anything outside of martial arts. He was aware of his dad occasionally going off to his tent to jerk off, but that was about it. He had tried jerking off himself, but had been very careful that he had never been caught at it. Now that caution was thrown to the winds as Ranma's hand gripped his cock through the fabric of his gi pants.

Genma tried again, "Ranma!"

The young martial artist turned a somewhat dazed look on his father. Genma asked, "Are you feeling alright?"

The boy seemed to think before saying, "Not really. I'm sweating, my heart is beating fast and my thing has gotten hard."

"Mine has gotten hard too," Genma responded.

"Does that mean you're going to go in your tent and rub your thing until it squirts?" Ranma asked.

"Call it a cock, not a 'thing.'" Genma admonished. "I think something in the berries we ate may be getting us hot and bothered. We could go in our tents and beat off, but I know something we could do together."

"Together?" Ranma wasn't sure he liked the sound of that. "Do you mean like you rub my cock and I rub yours?"

"Well, we could do that," the older man allowed. "But I was thinking of something that would likely be more fun for both of us. You'd have to be a girl, though."

"Wait a minute," the boy begged. "After all you said about women being weak and a distraction from the art and stuff, are you saying there is actually something good about being a girl."

"They are weak, but the do have their good points," the older man countered. "And there are some things they can do that men can't. Mostly men don't want to do those things. You don't have to do anything with me but you might find that you can't get relief with just your own hand."

"I don't like being a girl," Ranma complained. "I'm short, I'm weaker and my reach is shorter too."

"True, but you're faster in that form," Genma offered.

"I am?"

Nodding, Ganma said, "I noticed it when you were chasing me."

Frowning, Ranma said, "I'm still mad at you for the whole curse thing."

"At least you're still human in your cursed form," the older man pointed out. "When I'm a panda I can't talk and it's hard walking upright."

"So how do we do this stuff you're talking about?" the boy asked.

Genma picked up a canteen and said, "Take your clothes off, then use some of the water to turn into a girl. Be sure and dry off after, because I don't want to be turned into a panda by the water on your skin."

While Ranma was complying with this request, Genma stood up and undressed himself. Contrary to appearance, Genma was not fat. He was stocky in build in spite of his height, and he did have a bit of a "spare tire" around his abdomen. However the man was fit and muscular, if not so much so as his son.

The girl finished blotting the water off her skin and looked over to her father. She could feel a thrill go through her at the sight of his hard cock. She could feel a tingling in her breasts and her pussy was starting to lubricate.

At his instructions, the girl sat down next to her father. He hand sought out her breasts and began to gently massage the firm flesh there. When Genma began to tease the nipples of his daughter's tits, Ranma realized that breasts were actually good for something other than throwing her balance off.

She was a little surprised when Genma pressed his lips to hers. She went with it and then she felt his tongue probing at her lips she opened them to let his tongue in. While their tongues were dueling, Genma took Ranma's hand and placed it on his cock. Even though she had thought they weren't going to stroke each other off, she went ahead and wrapped her fingers around the shaft and started to rub up and down.

They continued on this way for a while until Genma's lips left Ranma's and moved down her face then her neck then to her chest. Genma's lips then closed over one of Ranma's nipples while the hand that had been occupied there moved down to start teasing the lips of her pussy.

The lips on her breast felt good, but nothing she'd felt previously could compare with the sensations of what was happening at the lips of her cunt. Ranma moaned softly into Genma's mouth. The feeling got better when the older Saotome began thrusting a thick middle finger into the depths of his daughter's cunt.

After this went on for a while, Genma move his lips from his daughter's breasts and moved down to her cunt. Soon he was tongue fucking her and Ranma was reveling in the sensation of a tongue moving in and out of her. All the while this was going on, she continued to stroke on her father's cock.

Genma moved his attentions from thrusting his tongue into Ranma's pussy started to lick and suck on her clit. That was pretty much the limit for the neo-girl. She was pushed over the edge and cried out from the intensity of her orgasm.

It took her a moment to recover. When she could organize her thoughts enough, she said, "That was amazing. If having a girl's body can feel that good, I may not want to change back to a boy."

"Glad you liked it, but we're not finished yet."

"There's more?"

Genma laughed, "You got to come but I haven't yet. Now you can do for me what I just did for you."

Ranma had to concede the fairness of it. Genma had just sucked her to the best orgasm she'd ever experienced. It was much better than anything she'd ever given herself with her hands while beating off in her boy form.

She moved around so she could take her hand off Genma's cock and put her lips over it. The first move was like a simple kiss on the tip. Since she knew nothing about blowjobs, her father had to coach her through it. Before long she was moving her head up and down and using her tongue. The earlier stroking she had done was a good start. Before long Genma bellowed, "I'm cumming!" and pumped a load into his daughter's mouth.

Ranma had masturbated enough to know what that meant, so she let the fluid cascade into her mouth. She swallowed but left enough to be able to savor the taste. She found the flavor was much to her liking and vowed to do what she could to taste it again.

When Genma's shaft started going soft in her mouth, Ranma asked, "Are we done for the night?"

"No chance girl," was the answer. "I'll need a little rest to recover. Give me about ten minutes then you can start sucking again. That should be all I need to get it up again."

"What are we gonna do next?" Ranma asked in excited tones. "Will it feel as good as what we've done already?"

"For the next step, we both get to feel good at the same time," her father promised. "What we do next is called fucking or making love."

At his daughter's confused expression, Genma clarified, "Consider it this way, I have a pole and you have a hole. The human body was designed for a man's pole goes inside a woman's hole."

"Ok, I guess that makes sense," the girl said.

A few minutes later, eager to experience more of wonderfully pleasant sensations, Ranma started sucking on her father's cock again. The effect of the berries let him recover quicker than he might have otherwise.

When Genma's organ was again stiff, Ranma got on her back and spread her legs as instructed. When Genma was positioned between her legs with the head of his cock at the entrance to her cunt, he warned her, "The first time always hurts for any woman or girl. I'm going to push in hard to break your barrier then hold still for a time to let you get used to me being inside."

"Barrier? What are you talking about?"

Not wanting to wait too long, Genma gave a condensed description of a hymen. When he finished he said, "Now that you know about this I'm not going to force it on you. If you prefer we can do more with our hands and mouths." He really hoped she would agree to go ahead with it.

Frowning, the red haired girl considered it. Finally she said, "Do it! You trained me to take pain. It doesn't sound like it will be anything really bad."

Grateful that she had agreed, Genma thrust in quickly. He could feel the girl's hymen break. When his pubic hair touched hers, he stopped and let himself just luxuriate in the feeling of warm moisture.

For Ranma she did feel the pain, but had to wonder why her father had made such a big deal of it. She'd hurt worse from getting hit. Still, it seemed important to him that she be prepared for it. She reasoned that maybe it wasn't so much the amount of pain inflicted but where she was feeling it. Maybe her cunt had a special significance to him that other parts of her body didn't.

She waited until the pain faded most of the way out. It still hurt a little bit, but she felt confident enough of to tell him, "It's Ok now. You can start moving."

With that reassurance, Genma moved his hips back, pulling his cock out until only the head remained inside. Then he slid back slowly until his pubic hair touched hers again. He continued to go slowly until Ranma begged him to speed up.

Their fucking continued on, gathering speed until Ranma reached another orgasm. The spasms of her pussy around his cock nearly made him cum as well. However he was able to hold it. When she had recovered he grabbed her and flipped over onto his back. She quickly took the hint and began to raise and lower herself on his impaling shaft. They changed positions again after she came again.



The next time they did it doggie style with Ranma on all fours and Genma behind her thrusting vigorously. This time when Ranma came, so did her father as he pulled out his cock and sprayed his seed over her back.

"Why did you pull out at the end?" Ranma asked.

"Didn't want to get you pregnant."

"Huh?"

"I'll explain it to you in the morning," he promised. "For now, it's late and I'm tired." He cleaned off and crawled into his tent. He was already asleep by the time Ranma, still in girl form, got into the same tent and snuggled up to him.

At times in the past they had to sleep together to conserve warmth. The weather was cold but not cold enough that their normal blankets wouldn't be enough. No, after what had just happened Ranma wanted to be close to her father. She wanted to be near that big, powerful body and pleasure-giving cock.

Shortly two figures arrived at the campsite. The elder could detect the scent of sex in the air. She looked over the camp and shook her head.

The little woman grabbed Shan Pu's hand nearly dragged her to the edge of the clearing and the trail. In soft tones the young warrior demanded, "Great-grandmother why are you stopping. Aren't these the people we were searching for?"

"Yes Great-Granddaughter they are," the elder confirmed. "But we are too late. I can smell the odors of sex in the air. The man has had sex with his child and she did not fight it."

Frowning the purple haired girl asked, "How do you know she didn't fight it?"

The Elder sighed and said, "There are no signs of a struggle or fight. No torn up ground, no broken branches, nothing to show a fight. I could smell not only the odor of sex but the scent of blood. I believe the man has taken the virginity of the girl."

"If we are too late to save the girl, should we not punish the man?" demanded the warrior.

"No, I don't think so," said the old woman. "First they were the under the influence of magic that made them do that. True, it could be argued that the magic gave them the urges but they were the ones to act on them, but I'm not going to get into that argument. Second, they are not Amazons. Third, they are leaving. If the Guide had not told us of them we wouldn't even have known of their existence."

"In our laws the penalty for a father committing incest with a daughter is castration or death, normally." She paused with a sigh. "I will have an artist draw pictures of their faces. If they ever return to this area they will be requested to leave. If they refuse, they will be forced to go."

"Why would they come back?"

"They will probably believe they could get cured by jumping into the Spring of Drowned Man," she explained. "Fools. The purpose of the curse is to teach a life lesson. What kind of lesson would you learn if you could cure the curse by walking a dozen meters to jump in another pool? That would be more of an inconvenience than a curse."

She turned and said, "Come, Shan Pu. We have no further reason to be here." They left into the forest.

Genma woke feeling disoriented. Where was he? It was still dark and he was in his tent. The air had that sort of heavy feeling you could sense just before it started raining.

He wasn't alone in his sleeping bag. There was a warm presence. Suddenly it all came rushing back to him. Jusenkyo! He had fallen into a spring and changed into a panda. Ranma had changed into a girl.

That wasn't the worst of it. They could have stayed the night, camping behind the Guide's hut. Genma had decided that they weren't going to stay in China a day longer than they had to. Rather than go to a nearby village to stock up on supplies they had traveled into the forest where they picked wild berries and nuts to supplement the meager supplies in their packs.

Oh Kami-Sama, what had he done? There must have been something in the berries that had an effect on him and the boy. It had made them both hornier than he could remember being in a long time.

Genma had used cold water to turn his son into his daughter then he'd fucked her like a cheap whore. This was a disaster! How could he call Ranma a man among men after fucking her. He was going to burn in the deepest pits of every hell known to every religion for what he had done to his child.

Worse than that, Nodoka would kill him and make the boy commit seppuku. Maybe there was some way of recovering from this. Maybe the boy didn't remember. However, since Genma himself remembered, that seemed unlikely.

It was a dream! Yes, that was the way. Tell the boy that he had dreamed it. Maybe he'd buy that and they could still go back to Japan and join the schools with the Tendos. Anything to get the boy's mind off this.

His train of thought was interrupted by the sensation of a petite feminine hand lightly stroking his cock. Eyes wide in shock, Genma said, "Ranma?"

"Good morning, Pop," the pleasant soprano voice said, "I really liked what we did last night. I was hoping we could do some more of it."

"No, that wasn't real!" Genma sounded desperate as he said it. "That was a dream."

"A dream?" The girl's tone was amused. "Then I guess I must be dreaming about how my cunt feels. I think I still can taste a trace of the flavor of your cum in my mouth. I want to taste that again. As often as you want to give me a sample."

"No! This isn't right!" Genma protested. Obviously the girl wasn't buying the argument about it being a dream. "Parents don't do that kind of thing with their children."

Still sounding amused she asked, "Why not? What we did was the most wonderful feeling I've ever had. If I didn't know we had to get up and get traveling, I'd want to spend the whole day fucking."

Not sure he was hearing correctly, Genma said, "It's one of the oldest rules of society. Parents aren't supposed to have sex with their children. In fact it's generally considered bad to have sex with any family members, like brothers or sisters, cousins, aunts and uncles and the like."

"Ok. I get that people think it's bad, but why?" Ranma repeated. "There has to be a reason why people think it's bad."

He thought about it for a moment. Finally he said, "Most religions preach against it, say it's a sin. There is also the danger of birth defects. I don't understand the medical reasons behind it but when close family members have children there is a bigger chance they will be born with some kind of health problems."

"Have children?" Ranma looked confused. "When you pulled out to cum, you said something about not wanting to get me pregnant. Are you saying that I might have got pregnant, if you had cum inside?"

"It's possible," Genma agreed. "Although I think a girl has to have a period before she can get pregnant."

"Period?" Shaking her head, Ranma said, "I think there's stuff you left out of my education. Before last night all I knew about sex was beating off and I learned that from watching you when you didn't think I was looking. You never told me anything."

"I didn't want you learning about anything that might be a distraction from the Art," Genma explained.

"Humph!" the girl responded. "I don't think that's a good enough reason. I want to know more about fucking. I want you to teach me by showing me."

"I can't, I mustn't!"

Grinning hugely, Ranma said, "You may say no with your mouth, but your cock is a lot more honest." Her stroking had brought her father to a full erection.

"So fucking family members is bad if the girl gets pregnant, right?" The redhead said, "Then I guess we'll just have to make sure that you always pull out before you cum so I don't get pregnant."

Grasping at straws, Genma said, "I'm a married man. I'm not supposed to fuck any women other than your mother, my wife."

"Yet you fucked me," Ranma said in a musing tone.

"There was something in the berries that got me aroused," the man with glasses tried to defend himself. "I wasn't thinking clearly. If I had been I wouldn't never gotten into that kind of position with you."

"Are you saying you don't want to fuck me again?" Ranma asked softly. She didn't stop her stroking of Genma's stiff manhood.

"Kami-Sama help me, I do want to," Genma said with bowed head.

Shortly Genma was on his back while Ranma bounced herself up and down on her father's cock. It was a quickie because both knew they would have to leave soon.

After they both reached their orgasms they quickly packed up and got ready to go. They hadn't got far when it started to rain. Genma shifted to moving on all fours as that was by far the more comfortable gait for a panda. He still carried one of the packs while Ranma carried the other. Although she was smaller in girl form, she was still strong and carried her pack without trouble.

As they walked Ranma carried on what was mostly a one sided conversation. Genma was able to make growling sounds and could readily enough convey a yes or no answer, but greater meaning was lacking. He could give a growl a question sound and with that he was able to convey that he need more information or didn't understand what Ranma had said.

"So I get the feeling that you worry what might happen if someone discovers us having sex, is that right?"

"Growf."

"You think if someone finds out you're fucking your daughter that you'll get arrested?"

"Growf."

"Well, I guess we'll just have to be careful that we don't get caught."

"Growl, growf, growl."

"Huh?" Ranma thought for a moment. "Are you saying that we might get caught even if we are careful?"

"Growf." That one sounded strongly affirmative.

"Hmm." Some more consideration took place. "You said that you're expected to fuck your wife, right?"

"Growf." The growl sounded hesitant.

"Yeah, I know you said you aren't supposed to be having sex with anyone besides your wife. That's not what I'm trying to get at. Now the question is, would anyone be surprised or upset if you were caught fucking your wife?"

"Growf." That sounded like a no.

"Then it seems simple. Until we get back home just tell people I'm your wife."

"Growf?"

"Yeah, I know there's a big difference in our ages, but I've heard of guys your age marrying girls as young as me before."

"Growf?"

"What I'm saying is that if you tell people we're married to each other, nobody would think it strange if we have sex. They wouldn't make a fuss if they saw us and not even if they only just heard us. Maybe we could just pretend to be married even when we do get back."

"Growrowf."

"Something wrong with that idea?"

"Growf." affirmative.

"I don't get it. If Mom's dead, who's going to know the difference?"

"Growf."

"Wait a minute. Are you saying Mom is still alive?"

"Growf."

"But you said..." She trailed off.

"Growr?"

She paused for a moment before saying, "Very sneaky Pops. I get it now. You never actually said she died. When I asked you just never said yes. I assumed you were so torn up over it that you didn't want to talk about it."

"Growf."

"I should be pissed off at you for letting me think she's dead. The way I feel this morning, I can't get mad. This does mean we can't live together as husband and wife back in Japan. Well, I guess we can still say that if we stop at any hotels or stay in any campgrounds where they check on guests."

"Growf, growr."

"Well, we can discuss that in more detail next time we get somewhere we can heat water to change you back."

"Growr?"

"Well, I thought I'd stay in girl form for a while."

"Growf!"

"Just while we're traveling. I figure I'll need to get used to this body. That doesn't mean I plan to stay a girl permanently."

"Growf."

"I don't know if I even could stay a girl permanently if I wanted to. Not that I want to."

"Growr."

She paused to think before asking, "Do you think Mom would freak if she found out about our curses?"

"Growf!" That was a strong affirmative.

"Then we're not going to be able to live with her. The Guide said we've turned into 'water magnets.' I guess that means we're going to have lots of water accidents. If that's true anyone we live with will find out."

"Growf." The tone sounded sad.

"We'll figure something out," She said. "We really need to figure out some better way to communicate when you're in this form."

They continued to walk through the rain.

AN: Ok I had this idea inside my head and needed to get it out. I don't know where I want to go with the idea or even if I do want to go anywhere with it. I have this concept. It starts out with Ranma having sex as a girl within a day of getting the curse. The important point is that she likes it.

You might ask, why do it with Genma. The first reason is simple - he's available. Even in canon it is established that Genma rarely leaves Ranma alone. The second reason is because I'm a sick SOB and like to write stories that include incest.

Because Ranma liked sex as a girl, I figure that it 'flips a switch' in her mind and she goes girlish. Because one of her first experiences with the girl body was so pleasurable, she wants to be a girl and stay in that body as much as she can. She still changes into a guy at times, but wants to change back to a girl as quickly as possible.

I've read fics where the insensitive jerk Genma would act like it was wonderful that a sexy girl wants to have sex with him a lot. He would do it with her on every opportunity and not care that this was his son.

I was thinking of a slightly different approach. Mainly it affects motivations for actions. I picture a Genma who is wracked with guilt. He feels that because of his bad choices (like going to Jusenkyo, pushing ahead instead of going to the Amazon village to get supplies, eating the magic berries and most of all having sex with his daughter) he has ruined his son. He feels that it is his fault that Ranma will never be the 'man among men' that he promised to Nodoka.

That sets the motivation. He wants to go to the Tendo home not to fulfill an honor agreement, but to make things up to his son. He hopes that if he can get Ranma engaged to one of the Tendo girls that the boy will have the chance to have sex as a guy and want to be a boy again.

Like the other chapters I posted on the blog today, I would like feedback on whether or not this story looks like something readers would like to see continued. I have written a second chapter, but that is all. To be honest I'm not sure where to take this idea. I could see Ranma turning into the school slut, or one of the Tendo girls convincing him/her to return to the manly side. Does anyone have suggestions on where this could go?

4 comments:

  1. This story needs a lot more work.

    The beginning looks more like a summary rather than a story. The story advances much too fast.

    As for the Amazons I don't really see a reason why they would get involved or even care, especially if you have no further plans for them.

    I don't really see a reason why to have them appear at all.

    And what about Ryoga? Not getting him cursed only makes sense if you have plans for a Ranma/Ryoga pairing later on. Maybe you could have him fall into the spring of drowned girl too. That could be interesting.

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  2. I enjoyed reading Genma's Shame. I would enjoy reading more of the story and wouldn't mind helping your come up with more ideas for it. It's a different way of getting Genma and Ranma-chan together.

    It does have some elements that are a little similar to another story that I've read that had Genma and Ranma-chan as sex partners. I wouldn't be surprised if it was one of the stories that you read where the insensitive jerk Genma would act like it was wonderful that a sexy girl wants to have sex with him a lot.

    I've thought of some possible ideas for what could happen in either a rewritten chapter 2 or could be put into a 3rd chapter.

    I would have sent this to you privately but you don't put your e-mail address with your stories and I don't have a Blogspot account to access it.

    If you wish to contact me can can e-mail me at dragonlord7@hotmail.com. If you have an MSN Messenger account you can contact me by the same e-mail address.

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  3. Interesting
    I believe I agree with Dragonlord. Lose the Amazons as they don't interact with Genma or Ranma they don't advance the story. You could leave them in but only to explain the berries

    Cynical Rabbit

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  4. Please come back and add to your stories! I am eagerly awaiting a continuation to this, What is Manly, Happi's Redemption, Mother and Father, Full Potential.

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